IWBAT revise and edit Johnny's last letter, by adding realistic dialogue, in order to improve the voice.
- Format: personal (friendly) letter
- Audience: Ponyboy Curtin
- Role: Johnny Cade
- Topic: what I've learned & my advice for Ponyboy
1. Do Now: Two/To/Too Practice (please complete in order):
2. Review: Tough Questions
3. Read Chapter 11 in The Outsiders and analyze the tough questions
4. Share Your Letter with Mr. T:
- In the upper left corner of your document, click Share.
- Next to People at kippbayarea.org who have the link can view, click Change.
- Next to Access: Anyone within kippbayarea.org, click Can view and select Can comment from the dropdown menu. Click Save.
- When the link to share is highlighted, press Ctrl + C to copy the link.
- Complete the form below, and use Ctrl + V to paste the link.
5. Revise Letter for Voice:
- Revising literally means seeing again.
- When we revise, we improve big-picture things in our writing, like our ideas and the way they connect to one another.
- We don't worry about the nitty-gritty details like capital letters and punctuation (that is editing).
- Today, we will revise specifically for voice.
- Voice is how the personality of the author (or speaker) comes through the writing.
- Since you are writing as Johnny, we are working to make Johnny's voice come through.
- We must first determine what Johnny's voice is like and then work to replicate it in our writing.
- Directions for Writer's Workshop:
- Reread your letter.
- Find places where your voice does not sound like Johnny and get rid of it or change it.
- Don't tell Pony things he would already know.
- Johnny uses improper (not perfect) English and has a Southern accent.
- Find places where you can make Johnny's voice come through more clearly.
- Johnny is quiet, but deep down, he is courageous. Show this in your writing.
- Johnny frequently talks to Pony about his feelings and is deep. Add this to your writing.
- FORMAT MATTERS.
- I have formatted my writing as a personal letter.
- I have written in complete sentences.
- I have indented all paragraphs with the TAB key.
- There is a space after each period, comma, and question mark.
- CAPITALIZATION COUNTS.
- I have capitalized the first word of each sentence.
- I have capitalized all proper nouns: specific people, places, things, and dates.
- SPELL WELL.
- I have used the correct forms of there/their/they're, your/you're, and to/two/too.
- I have correctly spelled Johnny, Ponyboy, Windrixville, and other words from the book.
- PUNCTUATE CORRECTLY.
- I have used end punctuation correctly, meaning all sentences end in . / ! / ?
- I have included commas after the greeting (Dear Ponyboy,) and after the number in the date (September 25, 1963).
7. Complete Exit Slip:
Your second unit assessment is tomorrow!